by Rob DesHotel & Dean Batali (58 pages)
Awards: None that I could find.
Points of Interest:
- Pacing: Long 6 page teaser. Act I ends on a good cliffhanger. Act II feels long as well, but ends with a twist identifying Oz as the werewolf and not Larry as we were mislead to believe. By the end of Act III we learn Oz is the werewolf, but the amount of time the characters spend thinking about who the wolfman is (and Oz acting oddly), one would think his name would have already come up.
- Screen Visibility: In one scene, Giles assembles a high-tech rifle. Considering his old-school sensibilities I think an “antique werewolf rifle” would have been more appropriate. In the script Giles doesn’t seem like a high-tech kind of guy.
- Formatting: Writing with some “attitude” directed towards the reader. “There’s a werewolf SNARLING at Willow, remember?” This creates an inclusive “live” storytelling feel to the script.
- Dialogue: Great line from Willow when she comments on Cordelia being the “girl next door” if you lived next to a brothel.
- Act Structure: Teaser, Act I, Act II, Act III, Act IV. Around 43 scenes.
Note: “PRELAP” is used as a transition. I don’t know what this means. Good twist with Larry being gay instead of being “outed” as a werewolf and then making a serious comment about homophobia that should be heard and understood by people experiences conflicted emotions.
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