Monday, September 20, 2010

Script-of-the-Week: Veronica’s Closet - Pilot

by David Crane and Marta Kauffman (58 pages)
Writing Awards: None that I could find
Points of Interest:
  • Pacing: In the teaser -- in only 3 pages -- the direction of the series is revealed.  Tension in the two acts is quite standard -- “What will happen between Ronnie, her husband and her company”. Second Act finish the script and ends quite abruptly leaving a need to watch the next episode.  Approximately  1.5 - 2 jokes per page.
  • Screen Visibility: Short yet descriptive.
  • Formatting: Action is capitalized and single spaced.  Characters are underlined.  Standard formatying.
  • Dialogue: Tight.  Parentheses used for addressing two actions.  Example: (ignoring her; to Ronnie)  In this case “her” is Dina.  Much of what Ronnie says feels more honest and real than other sitcoms. 
  • Action: Some characterization done by comparison to another character on a different show -- except a little different.  Subordinate characters have less descriptive characterization.
  • Act Structure: Only Two Acts.  TEASER, SCENE A. ACT ONE, SCENE B, C, D, E, (no F or G).  ACT TWO, SCENE H, (no I), J, K, (no L), M, (no N or O), P, (no Q), R, (No S), T, (no U or V), W, X. 

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